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minus-squareREgon [they/them]@hexbear.netlinkfedilinkEnglisharrow-up15·edit-23 days agoThat feels wrong, rythm-wise. Edit: Now I see what it is. The punctuation fucks up the last sentence + It feels odd to suddenly use archaic/incorrect/poetic syntax when you haven’t been doing it the whole way thru. Also it’s cringe
minus-squareroux [he/him, they/them]@hexbear.netlinkfedilinkEnglisharrow-up11·3 days agoIt doesn’t really have iambic pentameter. But my poetry never does either so Idk if I can even complain. The poem is trash though.
That feels wrong, rythm-wise.
Edit: Now I see what it is. The punctuation fucks up the last sentence + It feels odd to suddenly use archaic/incorrect/poetic syntax when you haven’t been doing it the whole way thru. Also it’s cringe
It doesn’t really have iambic pentameter. But my poetry never does either so Idk if I can even complain. The poem is trash though.